Rory had been in the military. He was very strong and tactical. He had become the biggest guy out of his buddies; he was huge! He could take down anyone in his path he wanted. He fought for his country and he'd fight for his lady, no matter the cost.
Larry had not been in the military like his brother. However, he had always been jealous of how big Rory was so every day when Rory worked out, Larry copied him move for move. Larry was strong too but he never could quite keep up with his brother. No matter how jealous he was of Rory, he would do anything for him.
As Rory and Larry traveled west from Chicago to L.A., they came across a man named Seth at a bus stop. They all got to talking and Seth asked, "Why are you guys traveling all the way from Chicago to L.A.?" Rory explained to Seth what all had happened to Sara and that they were trying to find Rex. Seth was deeply saddened because something very similar had happened to his wife as well. Rory and Larry felt bad for Seth so they decided to help him out.
They traveled with him to a small town in Iowa to find Victor, the pimp that took Seth's wife. Seth had heard that was where she was but he did not have the manpower to fight him. He had been too afraid to stand up to him until now. Long story short, they found Victor and while Seth was fighting him, Rory shot Victor in the chest and killed him.
At first, the guys were scared what would happen because Victor had many men that worked for him and they were afraid of an all-out-war. Instead the men and women that were captured or worked for Victor thanked Rory for killing him because he was a horrible man. Seth found his wife and they were happily reunited. He told all the men and women what Rory and Larry were trying to do and they all felt so terrible for Rory that they agreed to help. Especially since Rory basically freed them and saved their lives.
Seth's best friend Heath knew someone that owned a very small private plane so he was able to go to L.A. by himself to try to first find out if Sara was in fact in L.A.. Heath made it to L.A. and found Rex's compound where he figured Sara was kept captive. He quietly broke into Rex's compound, and even Rex's own house, and searched for her. He finally found Sara in a small, rusted shed-like building surrounded by many guards. Heath knew he could not bring her back by himself because there were too many men. So he came back to Rory and his army and told them of his findings. The group all got on buses and drove several days to L.A.
Rory, Larry, Seth, Heath, and the many men and women got to the compound and waited until it was dark to attack. Unfortunately, Rex caught word that they were in town and had prepared for the war that was about to ensue. At 1 a.m. the group snuck up to the compound and started to attack the guards. It quickly broke into an all-out-war. Larry found Rex and tried to run at him but Rex shot Larry in the shoulder. When Larry tried to crawl away, Rex, being the ruthless man he is, shot him once more in the chest and killed him. The war continued for many hours but Rory kept getting more help from the local people because Rex had struck fear into everyone for so long that they were sick of it. They'd do anything to get rid of him.
Everyone was getting tired and a lot of people were badly injured. Rory had had enough. He jumped into one of Rex's armored cars and drove it straight through the middle of the compound till he found Rex. At the last second before Rex could jump out of the way, Rory rolled down his window and shot Rex right in between the eyes. His body fell like a ton of bricks. For a moment, people kept fighting but once everyone realized what had happened, it all stopped. Rex's people sighed in relief. They were happy he was gone. They only fought for him because they feared more about what he would do to them than dying in combat.
Rory found Sara and embraced her. She looked like she had not eaten in days and she had been in the same dirty clothes she was in when she was taken. Sara looked deeply in his eyes and said, "Let's get out of here."
They returned to Chicago to find out that Rory's dad had passed away from a heart attack while they were gone. Since he had passed, the house now belonged to Rory. Rory had lost his brother and his father in the same week, but he finally got to come home with his wife. A few years later they had twin boys that looked exactly like Rory.
They stayed in that house till the day they died.
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Many of the characters are from the first story of the series "Stolen Sara." Some new characters, Seth and Heath, are Sugriva and Hanuman, the monkey king in exile and his monkey friend. Sugriva's brother (Victor) took his wife from him after a miscommunication. Rama defeated Victor when they went to fight him (like how Rory shot Victor). Hanuman had great powers and did go to Lanka (L.A. in my story) quickly by bounding there and found Sita and reported back. They fought with Ravana (Rex) and his army but Lakshmana (Larry) did not die. He nearly did but was healed with magic. I decided to let Larry die because in real life, there is no magic to cure people. Rama defeated Ravana with a blazing arrow. The end of my story is quite different from the original. I thought the original was very frustrating. When they finally found Sita, Rama did not know if Sita was pure after all that time and she nearly killed herself until he believed her. They went back to Ayodhya so Rama could claim his kingdom (like how they got the house) but people looked on Sita in a condescending manner because they thought she was impure and it was crazy that Rama took her back. Eventually, Rama exiled Sita and she lived in the forest and had the twin boys. One day Rama came across the boys when they were teenagers and noticed they looked a lot like him. He invited Sita back home to prove herself pure, and when she did she was taken into the earth with the nagas and it was said she could be with Rama in heaven. Rama lived for another thousand years until they met again in heaven. I thought that ending was ridiculous because they fought for like ten years to get her back and then Rama wasn't so sure about her anymore. I continued with the modern theme because I thought it was more relatable.
First off, I just wanted to say I’m glad I get to read the sequel to “Stolen Sara!” I liked how you developed this story and changed the ending (because I also didn’t really like the original ending…) The modern modifications in your story this week is more than last week’s and I’m in love with it. Everything is so cleverly integrated, like how the protagonists are going to L.A. (Lanka) and traveling through bus stops, into small towns, and in armored vehicles. The ending was a little short, but over all, the progression of the rest of the story was very well done!
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ReplyDeleteI really liked your take on this story! I was really intrigued and definitely felt that ‘wow’ factor during the battle when Rory shot Rex in between the eyes. It was like a moment of holding your breath waiting to see what happens! Your storytelling skills are great! One thing I might add is that just a little bit more background info at the beginning would help your readers a lot. I was just a hair lost at the beginning, just because I did not know the characters or what had happened in your last story. And of course, throughout, it all comes together nicely! Just a thought! I liked the ending, but what if you gave just a little happy (or sad, or whatever kind you wish) ending to wrap it up? Whether it be describing the twin boys, or Rory and Sara’s relationship! Great job girl, I can’t wait to see what else you write!
Hi Heather, I really enjoyed reading your story. I’m really glad you took liberty with the details of the ending because I agree with you that it doesn’t make any sense for Rama to fight a huge war only to reject Sita as impure in the end. I also like that you built up a reason that Ravana should be considered a villain other than just the fact that he kidnapped Sita. It makes more sense that so many people would willingly fight with Rama and give up on Ravana’s cause after his death when you see that he has this whole host of other bad things he does. I really enjoyed this – thanks!
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