I really enjoyed reading your portfolio. I like how you have taken the modern approach with your stories. I've started to read more and more stories in our course that have been re-written with a modern influence. Your story was very detailed and provided a lot of action in the story line that kept the reader entertained and wondering about what was going to happen next. Furthermore, I'm glad that you utilized the idea of a "series." I also made my portfolio a shortened series. In the story "Stolen Sara," you started with action, which I believe is a great approach. The only issue that I had was that I wasn't sure why Darius was kicking out Rory. Also, I love how you incorporated the idea of the red scarf to symbolize Sita's jewelry that she left as a clue. I think that it would be a great idea to expound more on Rex's character. Great work!
Hi Heather! I love your blog - it’s so cute! I’m really glad that I chose to give feedback on your portfolio this week. The title of your story “Hunky Hanuman” caught my eye, and although all of your stories are very great, I loved that one the most! I thought it was a really clever twist to add to the story of the Ramayana that we are all so familiar with. Honestly, I wish it would have ended that way! It still bothers me that Rama was so untrusting of Sita, and that eventually he broke her heart because of his own distrust. Your writing was very great, and the stories had a very easy flow! Your use of dialogue was super helpful in visualizing the story as well. You have a wonderful portfolio that you should be proud of, and I hope you continue writing past the conclusion of this course!
I really enjoyed reading your portfolio. I like how you have taken the modern approach with your stories. I've started to read more and more stories in our course that have been re-written with a modern influence. Your story was very detailed and provided a lot of action in the story line that kept the reader entertained and wondering about what was going to happen next. Furthermore, I'm glad that you utilized the idea of a "series." I also made my portfolio a shortened series. In the story "Stolen Sara," you started with action, which I believe is a great approach. The only issue that I had was that I wasn't sure why Darius was kicking out Rory. Also, I love how you incorporated the idea of the red scarf to symbolize Sita's jewelry that she left as a clue. I think that it would be a great idea to expound more on Rex's character. Great work!
ReplyDeleteHi Heather! I love your blog - it’s so cute! I’m really glad that I chose to give feedback on your portfolio this week. The title of your story “Hunky Hanuman” caught my eye, and although all of your stories are very great, I loved that one the most! I thought it was a really clever twist to add to the story of the Ramayana that we are all so familiar with. Honestly, I wish it would have ended that way! It still bothers me that Rama was so untrusting of Sita, and that eventually he broke her heart because of his own distrust. Your writing was very great, and the stories had a very easy flow! Your use of dialogue was super helpful in visualizing the story as well. You have a wonderful portfolio that you should be proud of, and I hope you continue writing past the conclusion of this course!
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